October Girl

Hmm, nice. I liked it. Really :lol: I love how the King and Queen seem so.... real. Like my parents they argue it's funny. I love your last line but ...

I like this, it's like a poem to best friends. It's very true, nice avatar by the way ^_^ but anyways I think it should be a little longer, the ...

I agree with Sofiel, this isn't blah at all. I liked the first and second verse. But you want to start off slow and end large. I just didn't see ...

OMG! I love this I mean usually I have more to say than OMG! But right now I'm breathless... This was really good I mean just the way everything was ...

Hmm, so different. I like it, but I think you need to add on a bit more.... I think you kind of forced the ryme, not a good thing..... just ...

Are you kidding me? That's it?! That's all you wrote.... c'mon get on the ball woman I want to read more!!! What's going to happen? Who are they? How'd they ...

For being so new at poetry this is great. It wasn't long so bear with me here. I felt a small conection of emotion but not as much as I ...

I really liked this poem, no mistakes just emotion and I really love that in a poem. The truth is, this poem is very good. But what is the reader ...

Hmm, I love it, very relaxing very calming very detailed. I must say I like this piece. You truely are a poet. Nice work. Although I was wondering maybe, just ...

This piece is so......wow, in a good way. The words really lifted me, I didn't have to wonder what the hell you were talking about, or question the emotion that ...

Hello, and great poem by the way. Jabber pretty much said it all so what I have to say is that I like it and I'm pretty sure everyone else ...

WOW, in a good way I assure you this piece is well, stunning. I like it alot, think it's powerful. For some reason it feels like something I would even ...

This is very good for you being a new member and all, but I feel like you some how forced the ryme. Which is a shame because all together it ...

Hello Amber, I have a piece like this in my portfolio as well, ecept yours seems to be about a lover or a friend. Mine is about my brother and ...

Hello, (yes it's in the right place) what to say aboout this piece? Hmm, let's start off with, what was I suppose to feel behind it? Hurt, betrayel, love? I ...